Shonenjump
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Post by Shonenjump on Aug 14, 2017 18:10:26 GMT -4
The style of a sentence is one of things that made novels different. In a meaning that, Sentences has sometimes inserted some ornament texts, metaphors even Figure of speeches to make the readers entertain to read. But sometimes it could be a pain.
Like, when a book is fully with advance english texts, most people, especially people with bad grammar, will have a bad time understanding the meanings of some text while reading.
Example, me. I need Google when im reading an english novel with daring sentences. But good thing is, not all books are advanced. There are some books that gives amore simplier english language in a easier way to read. Grammar-friendly the short version.
So, i want to compare, two types of sentences that always comes out in Novels. Underneath is a glimpse in a novel called "Wildwood", the book has mild-advance english sentences with a lot of metaphors. The second part is an simplier version that i changed. Well regardless, it's prolly worser but a bit more understandable with less metaphors.
The Train, now reaching the middle section of the bridge, let out a staccato burst of whistle, the tracks audibly groaning under its weight. Curtis dove for the Radio Flyer and let out a bone-numbling "OFF!" as his body met the metal floor of the wagon.
The Train, now reaching the middle part of the bridge, let out a sound of a whistle, the tracks starts vibrating while it coming. Curtis jumps to reach the Radio Flyer and cries "OFF!" as his body is on the wagon.
So which is better for you?
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quadramseed
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Post by quadramseed on Aug 14, 2017 23:37:13 GMT -4
I have read that book. It is a snooze fest.
That being said, figurative language and vivid description is an essential component to any novel; otherwise, it would read as an even more boring novel than the actual plot lends (which in most literature, is vapidly bland). Of course, I am not vehemently opposed to people that are not one hundred percent fluent in English liking simpler text; however, it is my personal opinion that an author is an author — well, in the novelistic sense — because they can write well enough to be able to paint a scene with words.
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Post by Juanma206 on Aug 15, 2017 12:03:21 GMT -4
I have read that book. It is a snooze fest. That being said, figurative language and vivid description is an essential component to any novel; otherwise, it would read as an even more boring novel than the actual plot lends (which in most literature, is vapidly bland). Of course, I am not vehemently opposed to people that are not one hundred percent fluent in English liking simpler text; however, it is my personal opinion that an author is an author — well, in the novelistic sense — because they can write well enough to be able to paint a scene with words. I wholeheartedly agree. An author is only as good as the scene they can paint, and the more vivid your colors, the more effective it is. Of course, the story still needs an actual plot. No one wants to read 300,000 words of slice of life, meandering plots that go nowhere but in a circle.
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Post by DragonStorm on Aug 15, 2017 22:53:59 GMT -4
I don't really mind both of them, nor have a preference for any of them. Both of them are fine.
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Post by ShenX on Aug 16, 2017 4:30:18 GMT -4
I don't really mind. But the metaphor one creates more of an image in my mind.
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